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Lend Me Your Heart by ~hollivay:iconhollivay:

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Lend me your hand
So I can pick my bruised body up.

Lend me your eyes
So I can see the good in myself.

Lend me your ears
So I can hear you call for help.

Lend me your mouth
So I can speak words I've never spoken.

Lend me your heart
So I can love.
©2008-2009 ~hollivay
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Author's Comments

I wrote this in Algebra because I was bored. :)

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~awesomedaisy27 Apr 10, 2008, 11:54:07 AM
I support Art In Class and of course, great writing.

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All men are created equal.
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~hollivay Apr 10, 2008, 11:56:40 AM
Me too! And these poems wouldn't be any good without the help of my revisor/editor, awesomedaisy27. She's always there for revising my poems during math. :)

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~Penfencer Apr 10, 2008, 12:54:03 PM
Simplistic, but I like it. I'd like to see this expanded though: I think the concept of using someone else's attributes for one's own purposes has a lot of depth to it, and you could do a lot more with it than just what you have here. :)
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~hollivay Apr 10, 2008, 5:20:28 PM
Definitely. I kind of thought it was a little short but I'll try and add on a few more stanzas.

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~alex-and-Ra Apr 10, 2008, 8:05:59 PM
The concept is pretty good, in my opinion. But I also agree with Penfencer: try to expand this few verses and this could be much better :-)

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you kneel before your heroes
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~hollivay Apr 10, 2008, 9:45:50 PM
Yeah. I'm definitely going to try.

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Mood: Joy ~PrincessBojangles Apr 11, 2008, 7:08:44 AM
Lovely hollivay. I also agree with ~alexa-and-ra who agrees with ~penfencer(lovely name!) more verses and this would be wonderful

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~hollivay Apr 11, 2008, 9:10:10 AM
Yes, indeed. I'm working on it.

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Take a look at my poetry and give it some comments. How 'bout it, eh?
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